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A thread for discussing and reviewing the /co/le story.
/co/le is a character who was created from bits and pieces of male characters /co/ liked at the time while trying to make a male version of /co/lette. More info here:
https://the-conservatory.fandom.com/wiki//co/le
I began work on this story in 2017 with help from another anon. After it stalled for a few years we're going to try resuming efforts to get it finished.
The story is done as of writing this, it's just a matter of edits, polish, and revision. It's currently over 80 pages long.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/14Fo9aexcIeI3KbEV3f0_0NLu2fyS1xOgr-Umri9zawU/edit?usp=sharing
If you're far enough into the future when you read this post, maybe it's already done.
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Gonna eead theough this a bit before sleep. I'll see if i can get through the document in a timely fashion.
>>420332
> I don't want to fall into that trap of "I can do better now" though. I've seen too many artists never finish a comic because of that.
From what I recall, the big story beats are set like concrete, no amout of "whatabout"s is gonna make me think the herculean task of making any big sweeping changes fit back into the story worth it. Think most we were dealing with was connecting beats togehter issue by issue and hammering out odd dialogue.
>>420336
We'll just take it issue by issue then, hopefully I'll have tie to start re-reading through it later today.
Replies:>>420340
I've made it through the prologue, if you want to try and start working on that, or I can read ahead afew issues to see if there's particular callbacks? though I don't recall that happening
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>>420339
I'd say just focus on anything that stands out to you as bad right now. If you found something in the prologue then lay it on me.
I'm reading through the prologue and I'm already catching typos. I'm fixing them as I go in the doc.
Really dumb stuff like "nortal" and "lust-educing".
If we wanted a long shot callback, we could put a callback in the epilogue where /co/le gets a second round with Arms Guy, but we'll get to that when we get to that.
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>>420340
As far as the story beats it seems fine. I do notice that the dialogue is light, a lot of "and they something like". We could add that in, but if it's we're doing straight spell check and flow check, we can move on.
>>420341
As I read through it I'm going to make changes here and there. I've already done so throughout issue 1. Nothing huge, just phrasing, chaining some instances of describing it as if it were comic page or a movie to just describing the scene itself... and adding in that SG is walking away from that bed with no modesty because it's just how the scene formed in my head.
As far as dialogue goes I'll keep it in mind and see about adding more as I read through, or adding in any suggestions you have.
What should our main focus be for this pass? Just re-familiarization and fixing anything we come across that we didn't notice before?
Or are we looking to seed in more call-forwards and callbacks?