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A thread for discussing and reviewing the /co/le story.

/co/le is a character who was creat...]]> 2025-07-31T22:28:00-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420334 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 image https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420336 2025-07-31T22:59:27-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420336 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420337 >420336
We'll just take it issue by issue then, hopefully I'll have tie to start re-reading thr...]]> 2025-08-01T08:34:39-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420337 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420339 2025-08-01T19:53:23-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420339 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420340 >420339
I'd say just focus on anything that stands out to you as bad right now. If you found so...]]> 2025-08-01T22:14:46-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420340 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420341 >420340
As far as the story beats it seems fine. I do notice that the dialogue is light, a lot ...]]> 2025-08-01T22:40:09-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420341 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420342 >420341
As I read through it I'm going to make changes here and there. I've already done so thr...]]> 2025-08-01T23:00:43-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420342 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420344 >420342
Sorry about no communication, gotta love last minute chores stapled on.

I gues...]]> 2025-08-04T19:08:32-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420344 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420345 >420344
As I read through it I do see areas where I would add more, as in more description in g...]]> 2025-08-04T22:45:00-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420345 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420346 >420345
Well, if you are offering to add more dialogue, we can start with the prologue. the mai...]]> 2025-08-05T22:20:30-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420346 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420347 >420346
She does have a name, it just doesn't get revealed until near the end of the story and ...]]> 2025-08-06T20:07:59-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420347 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420348 >420347
Oh, you want the shadow like that? Anything tho get me to binge the later eps of that s...]]> 2025-08-07T16:16:42-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420348 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420349 >420348
With any luck there are going to new episodes of that show very soon. Re-watching them ...]]> 2025-08-07T20:04:19-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420349 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420350 >420349
Putting in my bit of edit suggestions, not really liking how google comits a suggestion...]]> 2025-08-08T19:50:09-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420350 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420351 >420350
Yeah, I got an email saying there's been like 150 suggestions.

A couple things...]]> 2025-08-08T21:08:23-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420351 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420352 >420351
Oh crap sorry!

As for the note, Good to note. I'll try to remember that. I kno...]]> 2025-08-08T21:19:16-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420352 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420353 >420352
Yeah. I'm working my way down the doc and I'm trying not to butt in where I see you act...]]> 2025-08-08T21:37:51-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420353 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420354 2025-08-08T22:09:06-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420354 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420355 >420354
When it's a long paragraph describing a scene and just one character's perspective, it'...]]> 2025-08-08T22:16:25-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420355 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420356 >420353
You think we're lacking on the shadow gags right where I'm working, or do you want to k...]]> 2025-08-08T22:19:52-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420356 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420357 >420356
The shadow is an extension of her being. I may write them as two separate characters, b...]]> 2025-08-08T22:27:52-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420357 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420358
Another thing that never occurred to me (or maybe it did and I just don't remember) is that her shad...]]> 2025-08-08T22:52:30-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420358 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 image https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420359 >420357
Alright, I think that'll do for my bit of edits. I think I should've at least reformatt...]]> 2025-08-09T00:51:31-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420359 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420360 >420359
I think that works. I did some further edits to it so her shadow splits into many arms ...]]> 2025-08-09T10:41:47-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420360 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420361 >420360
Fair enough, but I still think there needs to be a change to it. maybe just shortening ...]]> 2025-08-09T15:42:03-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420361 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420362 >420361
SG's design choice is very much so a "ha ha, yeah, magic is hard, OK?" to hide her horn...]]> 2025-08-09T19:09:36-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420362 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420363 >420362
Hmmm, might just need to adjust the descriptors, then, perhaps? make it more obvious th...]]> 2025-08-11T22:15:27-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420363 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420364 >420363
We'll stick a pin in it for now. The main thing is she's dodging the question and has m...]]> 2025-08-12T07:46:29-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420364 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420365 >420364
Oh man, your already on 3? Gotta play some catch up. Lemme see what i can do today]]> 2025-08-12T08:32:09-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420365 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420366 >420364
While on the subject, what does it look like we have for descriptors? I assume a good t...]]> 2025-08-12T10:11:51-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420366 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420367 >420366
For the god of drums I was actually leaning more into African folklore. I think that's ...]]> 2025-08-12T10:40:22-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420367 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420368 >420367
I do think there should be some thing saying they are connected, as a big contention is...]]> 2025-08-12T14:08:08-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420368 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420369 >420368
Sig Curtis is a good example of strongfat.

The mental picture forming for pape...]]> 2025-08-12T14:37:25-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420369 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420370 >420369
>The mental picture forming for paper is either Douyin or Geisha style makeup with the ...]]> 2025-08-12T14:46:55-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420370 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420371 >420370
oops, forgot my thoughts on Fabric. I can concede not being wrinkly, but yeah... is it ...]]> 2025-08-12T14:48:30-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420371 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420372
>>420370
The sheet started white and turned green when Six-Nine-Six took possession of it. Did t...]]> 2025-08-12T14:55:00-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420372 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 image https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420373 >420372
oh no, i picked up on reading and found the bit he turns green right after paused.
...]]> 2025-08-12T15:03:06-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420373 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420374 >420373
I can see the first version of her face working (she had two different faces in that mo...]]> 2025-08-12T15:26:59-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420374 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420375 >420374
most likely, chin and maybe a more pronounced nose (the line of the arch is visible as ...]]> 2025-08-12T15:31:33-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420375 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420376 >420370
Crap, forgot folding as well!
That infinite folding french design is a pretty damn ...]]> 2025-08-12T15:42:25-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420376 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420377 >420375
It's been so many years I don't remember. I'm sure I could check the other thread for a...]]> 2025-08-12T16:12:24-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420377 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420378
>>420377
>It's been so many years I don't remember. I'm sure I could check the other thread for ...]]> 2025-08-12T18:59:44-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420378 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 image https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420379 >420378
I was thinking more "healthy" than fit, but either works.

Looma didn't start t...]]> 2025-08-12T19:20:14-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420379 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420386
>>420379
Ah I see, I'm either remembering something that we...]]> 2025-08-19T14:41:15-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420386 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420387 2025-08-19T14:49:37-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420387 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420388 >420386
Don't worry about it. Real life always takes priority.

The jump from the looph...]]> 2025-08-19T19:36:37-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420388 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420389 For issue 4, I've been meaning to expand the fight against...]]> 2025-08-20T18:06:04-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420389 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420390 >420388
I dunno, seems a little bit too abrupt? I dunno, feel like it can really feel like that...]]> 2025-08-20T19:20:46-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420390 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420391 >420389
Hmmm, maybe I can jump ahead and give my two cents]]> 2025-08-20T22:24:21-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420391 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420392 >420390
Having a bit where she finally finds him again on Earth can also lead into the sudden j...]]> 2025-08-20T22:52:59-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420392 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420393 2025-08-22T21:46:42-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420393 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420394 >420393
Will get to it soon. Think I might be better off just reading it as is before i try edi...]]> 2025-08-24T12:29:33-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420394 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420398 2025-09-29T12:46:52-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420398 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420399 >420398
Alright. I'll be around.]]> 2025-10-01T14:26:25-07:00 https://boards.plus4chan.org/coc/t420334.html#p420399 /coc/ >>>/coc/420334 none